in an instant we're there
the slap painless,
spools of regret unravel my soul
i beg the gods to bless me with wings
or turn me to dust,
an unbalanced bell
rings inside me
our actions ride the heat of anger
barely dressed in a cloud-like gown
i wait for the sun
to light our bed of darkness.
me
winter 2013
mag
whirl
Your words bring out so much of life !!
ReplyDeleteanger will def lead to places we did not think we would go...its that empty feeling after, unsure and swirling that i feel in your words...unsure where to go next....
ReplyDeletewow- thoses last 3 lines say it all
ReplyDeleteVery nice, Paige... I especially like the final stanza.
ReplyDeleteNice little set of snapshots.
ReplyDeleteCurious, intriguing and rather dark...
ReplyDeleteYou conjure up an interesting scene that has a number of possibilities. Let's hope he tries to make things right in the morning...if he has survived!
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ReplyDeleteThe slap was painless..wow..powerful line to grab the readers attention..nicely done..
dear truedess: love your name - sounds like a character from
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that first line just wrote itself.
An excellent and exquisite poem.
ReplyDeleteThat unbalanced bell chimes..maybe without name..untitled..but unique..always worth hearing..
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the 3rd stanza - an unbalanced bell. Excellent visual- thank you.
ReplyDeletethis is sad. this is excellent!
ReplyDeleteleovi: wow! thank you for the beautiful compliment.
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ReplyDeleteinsane bloom: love your title! thank you so much.
ReplyDeleteIt's that moment that feels like complete silence after we have done a terrible thing and there's no going back,,,You have described those moments so well with this poem,,,,
ReplyDeleteThat reads like a resuscitating breath, Paige. I like this one.
ReplyDeleteThis is cool and dark and rather scary, but I think that you have left enough of the story unwritten so that the reader is drawn in and comes to her/his own conclusion. It's an awesome read.
ReplyDelete'spools of regret unravelling in my soul' - my favourite line!
ReplyDeleteellecee: hi and thank you for your words, ellecee.
ReplyDeletewalt: I like your description. thank you.
ReplyDeleteheidi: hi! thank you for your thoughtful read of my poem.
ReplyDeletehi shadow - thank you for letting me know which part of this poem touched you.
ReplyDeleteOh man, my heart feels so heavy reading this. It's so terrible when you find yourself utterly displaced by some stupid moment you let carry you both into darkness, and all you can do is wait, as you say, for the light to return.
ReplyDeletecammila: oh, sorry. thank you for reading :[
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